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Your days still make me weep
for all your losses
far too young and undeserved
you'd give back every dime for
one day, one hour, one minute
   --one breath--
so would I, love, so would I.

The eyes of your young ones
are theirs - and my brother's as well...

Across the miles
in the darkest of night
my heart reaches out to touch yours
I still taste the tears you hide...
even when you mask them
behind your impish smile
   --to chase the demons away--
I still do, too...every day even still.

You're so skilled in hiding
behind laughter -- I learned that well from you
They never understood, did they?
(they still don't)

These decades of twilight
we've never laid them to rest, have we?
You replaced my loss...
I could never - nothing ever could
   replace yours...

To this day, your barley whisper
with ashtray subtleties
can wake me like a feather.
Our childhood souls collided
   --bloodlines are our bond--
memories of loss and gain
run deeper than our veins...
deeper than the sea.
©2008-2009 ~ProsePetals
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I actually wrote this in 2004, and had posted it here back then. I dug it up last night...

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:iconvirangelus:
"can wake me like a feather."


That is a very powerful line! Dramatic imagery, and then the concept itself of feeling as if you were but a feather, admired from afar indeed but how many really know what it's like to be so easily jarred out of your surroundings.

The poem itself feels like a haunted echo.

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Art defines our reality, who we are, where we are going, as how sad defines happy... --It is our counter-existance.
:iconprosepetals:
Thank you. :heart:

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"...I can be cruel, but let me be gentle with you..."

~~Be careful...it's dumb out there.
:iconkagomeresurrected:
Like i had meant to say--a lot of us believe that death doesn't end anything, just rebirths it

Who knows <3

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*KagomeResurrected :heart: @summaro :heart: *KagomeResurrected

sammich :faint:
:iconprosepetals:
<3

--
"...I can be cruel, but let me be gentle with you..."

~~Be careful...it's dumb out there.
:iconjlflores:
I really like it, love the echo of memories in it... the subject is very tricky, but you sound so honest... love it.

--
Humanidad, que estú;pida hija de puta eres. Charles Bukowski.
:icondrearythoughts:
perfect

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All things must change
From something new
To something strange
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Also check out my historical costume designs at ~Musichetta
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:heart:

--
"...I can be cruel, but let me be gentle with you..."

~~Be careful...it's dumb out there.
:iconprosepetals:
:heart:

--
"...I can be cruel, but let me be gentle with you..."

~~Be careful...it's dumb out there.

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